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I don’t know about you, but there is nothing going on, here, in June. All the spring festivals, dog shows, concerts, etc. have been canceled due to Covid19. In my area we are starting to open up, but very slowly. We’re still in Stage One. Parks and playgrounds are now open, hairdressers and barbers, and a few restaurants. That’s about it. In my city we have been very lucky and have had a total of 40 cases and no deaths. But for our long holiday weekend, Stage One, they pushed ‘camping at home’, with tents in the back yard and RV’s in the driveway. Now, for the summer, they’re pushing and putting money into ‘Holiday at Home.’ We’ll see how that works.

Me, I bought some backyard patio furniture and have my small garden planted. Our weather is warming up. My rescue dog is adjusting and enjoys laying on a small plot of artificial grass. And I’m getting names of books I have to read. We’re all set for our ‘Summer at Home’.

 

Death Southern Style has been through two rounds of editings and revisions. It’s now with two beta readers. Unfortunately, one of my beta readers lives in Brooklyn.

 

 

She’s been through two months of the corona virus and shelter-at-home and listening to sirens all day long. As the sirens began to lessen, she is now only blocks from the riots that have started. Her mental health and worry about her family are affecting her and she may not be able to continue to read.

As soon as I get the book back with comments it goes for formatting. I’m hoping to have it up for sale by July 1st. It will get there.  So, for now, I’m in limbo with Death Southern Style. Everything is in someone else’s control. Sigh… I’m working on a pre-order date. Once I get one, I’ll add it to my website.

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I have continued writing 100 words a day. I joined a ‘100 words a day’ group so I have accountability. I’m working on The Foundation Lydia’s Story, the second in the series, which I’ve mentioned before. I’m about one third of the way through it.  I need to reread it and work out some structure and plot details and do some more research on Peru.

 

Since I’m working On Lydia’s story, here’s an excerpt (draft).

 

“Marilyn Peterson?”

The woman nodded.

“I'm Maggie. The woman behind you is Sara. We're here to help you escape.”

Marilyn's eyes widened. She swung around to see Sara, dressed as another female repair person, in the kitchen doorway.

She swallowed several times, her hands clutched together. “I don't understand. You have to go. My husband could be home soon.”

“We know, Marilyn. Diane, one of our team is watching for any sign of him. We also know that when he comes home today, he's going to beat you within an inch of your life. He may not stop there this time. We know he's been abusing you for years. We're here to get you out and away from him. We want to save your life.”

“You can't...I can't...” she looked down at her ankle. She wore a monitoring device. “If you cut it off, he'll know. He monitors it from work. If he notices anything unusual, he phones. If I step outside the house, he'll know. You can't save me.”

Maggie pulled out a pair of metal cutters. “We know about your monitor. No man should put something like that on anyone, except maybe an alleged pedophile or murderer, released into the community. It should never to be used on any woman, including a wife. We can take care of it. Sara?”

Sara slipped into the room and pull out a six-inch piece of wire with hooks and little black boxes on it. She bent down and attached it to the monitoring device. Several minutes later she pulled at both ends. She gave a curt nod to Maggie and held out her hand. Maggie handed her the cutters.

“No, don't. He will know right away and come home and kill me.”

“Hold on, Marilyn. It will be fine. We know what we’re doing. Think about what you need to bring with you. You can only take a very small bag.”

Marilyn held her breath. Sara cut through the bracelet.

Nothing happened.

Marilyn stared at Sara and then at Maggie. “It didn't go off. He didn’t hear it?”

“No. We do know what we're doing.”

Marilyn stared at the phone.

“He’s not going to call. Slip your foot out of the bracelet. We don't have much time. I'll carry the monitor while you pack. Don't worry about clothes or jewelry. We'll replace anything you’ll need.” Maggie looked at the thread-bare cotton housedress. “Take the few things you can't live without.”

Marilyn stumbled upstairs into the master bedroom. She dragged a stool to the closet door. She opened the door and climbed up on the stool. In the back corner she jerked out some sheets and threw them on the floor. She pulled out another sheet with something in it. She gently unwrapped the sheet and brought out a small rectangular wood box. She clutched it to her chest

“He doesn't know about this. He doesn’t let me keep anything from my family or my life before he married me.”

“Bring it along. Is there anything else?”  Maggie said.

“I have my thyroid medication.”

Maggie paused. “Take a few pills, leave the bottle. Is there anything else?”

Marilyn shook her head. “No, I don't want to remember anything about my living hell for the last ten years.”

"That's why we're here, so you can leave this hell and move on with your life. We'll get you a new identity. He will never find you. You're going to be free."

“I don't believe it can happen. I've been praying for it for years.”

“Someone heard your prayers. Let's go.” Sara grabbed Marilyn's thin arm. “Do you get any food?”

“He eats his lunch out or orders it in. He brings groceries home every night so I can cook for him. I get anything that's left over. There's food in the fridge for his breakfast. He counts the eggs and bread slices, but I can manage to steal a little orange juice and jam.”

Sara shook her head. “If I had my way we'd stay here and take care of that bastard when he gets home.”

Maggie put her arm around Marilyn's shoulders. She shot a glance across at Sara. “Down girl, that’s not our assignment this time. You can always ask to come back.”

Maggie pulled out her phone from the tool belt. “Lydia, meet us in the alley out back. Come on, Marilyn, you're out of here.”

Sara slipped out of the room and returned seconds later. “I dropped the monitor on the bed. If he monitors her movements, he'll think she's lying down.” She moved to the back door and opened it.

“I don't see anyone. No neighbors in their yard, although we should thank one of them for telling us about you.  Give me your box. Let's go.” Sara grabbed the wooden box from Marilyn and sprinted across the yard.

Maggie kept her arm around Marilyn and guided her through the yard, through the gate and into the alley. The telephone repair van pulled up with Sara inside. She leaned out and helped Maggie hoist Marilyn through the sliding side door and into the van. Maggie hopped inside and pulled the door shut. “Go, Lydia.”

The van drove slowly down the alley. It turned right, onto the main street and slowed to a stop. Diane climbed down the pole and raced across the van. She climbed in the passenger seat and the van’s speed increased but stayed under the speed limit. Lydia drove toward the freeway. They couldn't afford to be stopped. They needed to get the woman to the safe house. Her husband would be home in a few hours and looking for her. They had to assure her safety and quickly.

He would not be happy to find his possession gone.

I finished the damn book.  And it’s off to the formatter.

I thought I’d finished weeks ago but kept going back and making changes and reading it over and over. Every time I’d find something new. I had a couple of friends read it and they sent some errors they caught. So back again to make a few corrections. Here are some of the self-editing I did in no particular order.

I had a couple of names that were very similar. It could be confusing to the reader, so I went back and changed them. Thank heavens for find and replace.

I also used find and replace, for those lovely words like – as – just and – the ings.

I cut and moved sections, so the book flowed better, and it fit the timeline.

I checked for spelling, both with spell check but also by reading it through.

I checked for grammar and punctuation. My grammar is good (I think) but punctuation is my weak point. And I find Word and I sometimes disagree on what I thought it should be.  I’ve got feedback from other writers and apparently things like the use of commas is different depending on editors.

I made notes and went back to check eye color stayed the same for each character, if one man drank scotch and the other whisky, I made notes and made sure it stayed the same through the book.

I went back and read each person’s journey to make sure it made sense and I made sure the conflicts between the characters was resolved by the end.

And I’m listening to the reading of the book. People have suggested three different methods of doing this. I’m going to try all three and see which works best for me.  The ones recommended were Autocrit, WordPress and Office 365.

Now to see what it reads like once it’s in print and how many errors I missed.

I’d love to hear what other people check for when they self-edit.

Gayle M. Irwin is an award-winning author and freelance writer, being recognized by Wyoming Writers, Inc., and the Wyoming Press Association for several of her works. She is a contributor to seven Chicken Soup for the Soul books and the author of many inspirational pet books and stories for both children and adults. Her first novel, a clean, contemporary pet rescue romance titled Rescue Road , released November 8, 2019. The follow-up book, Finding Love at Compassion Ranch , released in May 2020. She subtly weaves important life lessons within the lines and pages of her stories, including the importance of pet rescue and adoption. An animal advocate, she volunteers for various dog rescue and humane society organizations and donates a percentage of all book sales to such groups. Gayle resides in Wyoming with her husband and their adopted animals. She creates a weekly blog and a monthly newsletter. Find her blog and learn more about the author, her writing endeavors, and her pets at her website:

Beverley : Which genre or genres do you write or prefer to write? And why?

Gay le: I began as a children’s author, writing inspirational pet stories which t each important life lessons, such as courage, perseverance, and friendship. I spent a few years taking additional creative writing classes at the local community college, and last fall I released my first clean, contemporary western r omance called Rescue Road. The story takes place in Montana, a state in which I used to live and where my parents still live. The love story revolves around pet rescue and adoption, an issue close to my heart. Rescue Road is the first in a series I’m calling Pet Rescue Romance. My desire through my books is to educate, entertain, and inspire, whether the

Beverley: Who influenced you the most in deciding to become a writer?

Gayle: I’ve enjoyed writing since I was a teenager, at which time I composed stories based on my favorite television shows. I studied journalism in college and began my writing career as a reporter. A few years later, I became an editor and freelance writer. My work as an author started in 2007 when I wrote and published my first children’s book about my blind dog titled Sage’s Big Adventure: Living With Blindness . The two most influential people in my life were my junior college journalism instructor, Arlene Larson, and, when I pursed my bachelor’s degree at the University of Idaho, Lois Melina; she even hired me to help her with her Child Adoption Newsletter during my last year of school. I feel blessed to have been tutored and encouraged by both of these creative, strong women during my formative years.

Beverley: What gets your creative juices flowing?

Gayle: Spending time in nature and being a volunteer animal rescue transporter. I was raised in small towns and on a small farm in Iowa, where my parents and I lived until I was 17. We then moved to the Rocky Mountain region of the United States. I was raised to appreciate nature and I’ve been an animal-lover since childhood. Those facets of my life remain strong. I enjoy traveling and visiting America’s national forests and parks, and I possess a passion for helping animals in need; therefore, I serve as a volunteer transporter for rescue organizations, helping animals go to their adoptive families and taking animals from kill-shelters to rescue groups. My pets (2 dogs and 2 cats) are rescues, and nothing delights me more than to know a cat or dog that’s been abandoned or abused find a new loving home.

Beverley: Do you have a favorite cartoon character? Why?

Gayle: No, I’m not a cartoon person.

Beverley: Who would you love most to meet ‘in person’ and why?

Gayle: Betty White because of her love of animals and her tireless work on behalf of animals in need. Plus, she’s so funny! I loved her character in “The Golden Girls!”

Beverley: If you had an unexpected free day what would you do with it?

Gayle: I would rent a cabin in the mountains for the night and relish the tranquility and scenery … and write!

Beverley: What are you working on now?

Gayle: I recently released another book in my Pet Rescue Romance series. Finding Love at Compassion Ranch is the story of Erin and Mike, who knew each other in high school, but haven’t seen one another in more than 30 years. They reconnect at Compassion Ranch, a sanctuary for former research animals. Erin stops by to volunteer for two weeks, and Mike is the ranch manager; both lost their spouses during the past five years. Compassion Ranch may provide a second chance at love for them, just as it provides a second chance for the animals.

The next project is a Christmas novella set in the Jackson, Wyoming area. The title of the book is In the Shadow of Mount Moran: A Christmas Pet Rescue Romance. The book will be available mid-to-late November.

All three books of the Pet Rescue Romance series are set in the Yellowstone National Park area. Rescue Road is set in southwestern Montana; Finding Love at Compassion Ranch is set in northwestern Wyoming; and the Mount Moran book will be set in western Wyoming, near Jackson and Grand Teton National Park, just south of Yellowstone. I lived in West Yellowstone, Montana for about four years, and I lived in the area where Rescue Road is set for nearly seven years. I love this part of the country, and I plan to write this series based upon locations in Montana and Wyoming.

Blurb for Finding Love at Compassion Ranch:

A ranch like no other …

Erin Christiansen is still adjusting to life as a widow. She seeks additional healing by volunteering at Compassion Ranch, a sanctuary for former research animals. Upon arrival at the majestic and unique northwestern Wyoming ranch, she meets Mike, a man she knew in high school, whose compassion for animals and people might be the balm Erin needs.

Retired veterinarian Mike Jacobs is no stranger to loss. Five years after the accidental death of his wife, he now serves as ranch manager of Compassion Ranch. He not only fixes fence and provides tours, but he applies his veterinary skills and his heart for animals to his work. Upon recognizing Erin from high school, he can barely believe his first love will spend a few weeks at the sanctuary.

Can Erin and Mike span the years since they have seen each other or do they, like many of the rescued animals, have wounds that run too deep to trust and love again? 

Excerpt from Finding Love at Compassion Ranch:

Erin heard the sound that escaped from Mike’s mouth, even with his lips sealed over hers. She attempted a step back, but the wooden fence, and Mike’s body, ensnared her. So did the feelings which resurrected. The only man who had kissed her in more than twenty-five years had been Daniel. He hasn’t even been gone two years and look at yourself , Erin’s brain raged. She pulled her mouth from Mike’s. Immediately warmth drained from her. She placed her hands on Mike’s brawny shoulders.

        “I’m sorry, Erin,” he whispered. “I shouldn’t have done that. I just … I’m just so attracted to you and seeing you here, so filled with compassion and grace, your loveliness just shines, and I’m drawn to you like I haven’t been to anyone since I lost Elizabeth.”

        “You’re so sweet, Mike, I just don’t know what to say. Except I …” Her hands dropped to her sides. “Daniel’s been gone less than two years. I’m still processing …”

        “I completely understand. That’s why I’m apologizing.”

        He backtracked toward the gate and held it open for her. “Here, let’s step out and talk for a bit.”

        Erin gave one more pat to Hope before stepping out of the enclosure. She walked to a whining Winston, untied the dog’s leash from the post, and picked him up into her arms. She carried him through the open barn door and stopped near the corral. Erin gazed at the sky, filled with twinkling stars. A full moon overhead shone like the sun upon the landscape, topping the nearby mountains with golden glitter. Shadows of pine trees fell upon the landscape. The quiet of the night enveloped her and the attraction toward Mike danced within the landscape and entangled within her heart, beckoning her to join subtle music. Erin sighed. She sensed his presence beside her.

        “Beautiful night,” he whispered.

        “Yes, it is,” she responded.

        Erin set Winston near her feet and turned to Mike. “I know we have feelings for each other, and we share a common tragedy. I’m just not sure I’m ready to leave Daniel’s memory behind right now.”

        Mike placed gentle hands upon her shoulders and looked into her eyes. “I do understand, Erin, believe me. I don’t want you to feel you’re betraying Daniel nor am I asking you to forget him. The two of you shared many years together; Elizabeth and I did, too. I won’t ever forget her. Just as I needed time to accept her passing, you need time to accept Daniel’s passing. I guess what I want you to know is … I loved you when we were in high school. I missed you every day those first few years, and I never forgot you. I let you go because I knew we were both young, but I really didn’t want to let you go.”

        “Why didn’t you tell me then how you felt?”

        He sighed and glanced to the sky before returning his gaze to her face. “I tried. I did ask you to come to Seattle, if you remember.”

She nodded. “I remember. But all you said was you wanted me to come to Seattle; you didn’t say why or that you loved me.”

“I wanted to, but I listened to my dad and my best friend and kept my feelings bottled up. I focused on my schooling and my career. I made a mistake by not being truthful about loving you. I didn’t know what happened to you, where you were, but I looked for you at our fifth high school reunion. I thought if I saw you there, I could tell you how I felt and maybe we could try again. But you weren’t there.”

She shook her head. “I was planning my wedding then and since I had only attended high school that one year, I didn’t have the inclination to go.” She stared into his eyes. “I actually thought I’d hear from you that first year of college. I did wait, Mike, but by my sophomore year, I figured you weren’t interested after all, and I moved on.”

“To Daniel.”

She shook her head. “Not at first, but I began dating. I met Daniel the start of spring semester. By summer, after meeting each other’s families, we were serious. I figured you had moved on, too.”

He nodded. “I dated a bit, but my feelings for you didn’t subside. I didn’t try to find you because … well, my parents kept pushing me to do well in school and get into vet school and launch my career. I regret listening to them, and not my heart.”

He placed his hands on her face and looked deeply into her eyes. “I still love you, Erin, and now that we’ve reconnected, I want you to know I’m here for you. Whenever you feel ready, I’ll be here. We can stay in touch, visit each other now and then, and see what happens. Maybe you’ll come to love me, maybe you won’t. I’m okay with that. I’m not going anywhere. But, if nothing else, you can know you have a good friend, even a special companion if you want. I’m here.”

Her eyes searched his, and she saw honesty and integrity … and love. She lay her head on his shoulder and felt him wrap his arm around her waist.

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I can’t believe we’re already in June. It’s been a very different year so far. In my area we are starting to open up, but very slowly. For our long holiday weekend (Victoria Day), they pushed ‘camping at home’, with tents in the back yard and RV’s in the driveway. Now we’re moving toward summer, and they’re pushing for ‘Holiday at Home.’ I have no intention of flying anywhere or driving very far. It’s a new normal.

For my New Normal, I bought some backyard patio furniture and have my small garden planted. My rescue dog is adjusting and enjoys laying on a small plot of artificial grass and I’m set for ‘Summer at Home’. My plan is to write on my WIP and read. I’d love to get caught up on my reading.  

I’m getting names of books read. I’d love recommendations. What are you reading? What do you recommend – even your own books? What’s in your TBR pile?

I only have a couple so far:

Killer Chardonnay by Kate Lansing

Small Town Storm by Allie Harrison 

Black Pearl by Donnell Bell

Would love to hear what you’re reading and doing for the summer. Please share.

The corona virus is with us, all around the world. I often use news headlines or stories I find buried in the news in the plot or development of my stories. Whatever genre you write, have you used the corona virus in your story?

The corona virus has been with us for at least three months. The main ways to protect yourself and others is to wear a mask and practice social distancing, washing your hands, and staying at least six feet apart.   Is there a way to use the situations that we see these situations in our city, country, or area as part of a plot in our novels?

I write romantic suspense and I don’t see how I could use it in a romance. Romance is about relationships, developing a relationship, touching, holding hands, or kissing. How do you do this if you stay six feet apart and wear a mask? I find wearing a mask covers the face so you can’t even see a smile. I suppose you could use it in an online relationship. If you write romance, sweet romance, YA romance, contemporary romance or any other genre, are you writing a book that uses the corona virus in your story? If you are, how are you incorporating it into a romance in this New Normal? Or how could you incorporate it into a romance?

As I’m writing this, I’m also thinking about how this might be affecting relationships in today’s New Normal. Hmm.

I could use the virus in the suspense writing part of a book. The villain could carry the virus, or he could be in contact with the virus. He could spread it to many people. It might even be part of his plot to harm people.   Is anyone using it in mystery or suspense? What about other genres?

I’d love to hear your thoughts about writing in your genre with, or about, the Covid 19 virus and the New Normal.

Memorial Day is an American holiday, observed on the last Monday of May, having been observed on May 30 from 1868 to 1970. It honors the men and women who died while serving in the U.S. military. Memorial Day 2020 occurs on Monday, May 25.

Originally known as Decoration Day, it originated in the years following the Civil War and became an official federal holiday in 1971. Pre-Corona Virus many Americans observe Memorial Day by visiting cemeteries or memorials, holding family gatherings and participating in parades, going to beaches and summer cottages. Unofficially, it marks the beginning of the summer season.

In the middle of the corona virus the weekend now varies from state to state. Social distancing is required, group sizes vary from ten people up to maybe fifty. (I don’t know each state’s requirements). People are heading to the beaches but there are now rules to follow. Large groups and concerts are all canceled.   

Historically the Civil War, which ended in the spring of 1865, claimed more lives than any conflict in U.S. history and required the establishment of the country’s first national cemeteries.

By the late 1860s, Americans in various towns and cities had begun holding springtime tributes to these countless fallen soldiers, decorating their graves with flowers and reciting prayers.

Each year on Memorial Day a national moment of remembrance takes place at 3:00 p.m. local time.

It is unclear where exactly this tradition originated; numerous different communities may have independently initiated the memorial gatherings. And some records show that one of the earliest Memorial Day commemoration was organized by a group of freed slaves in Charleston, South Carolina less than a month after the Confederacy surrendered in 1865. Nevertheless, in 1966 the federal government declared Waterloo, New York, the official birthplace of Memorial Day.

Happy Memorial Day!

I know, I’m late celebrating our Canadian Victoria Day. Blame it on last brain from the Covid 19.

Victoria Day is a federal Canadian public holiday. It’s celebrated on the last Monday before May 25th , in honour of Queen Victoria’s birthday. It’s always one week before the American Memorial Day. The holiday has been observed in Canada since at least 1845, originally falling on the sovereign’s actual birthday. It continuous to be celebrated in various fashions across the country on the fixed date. When Queen Victoria died in 1901, parliament made her birthday an annual holiday.

The date is also, simultaneously, that on which the current reigning monarch celebrates their birthday. It is Queen Elizabeth II’s official birthday, although her actual birthday is April 21st . The weekend is sometimes informally considered as marking the beginning of summer season in Canada.

The holiday has always been a distinctly Canadian observance and is celebrated as the first big camping weekend, opening up of summer cottages, summer festivals in parks and almost always big fire works displays. All this before the corona virus pandemic. 

This year, because of the corona virus, everything was cancelled. Camping at home was encouraged. It included putting up tents in the back yard and parking the RV’s in the driveway. All gatherings and celebrations were cancelled, including all the fireworks display. It was the New Normal.

Hope all Canadians still had a Happy Holiday Weekend.

And tomorrow I’ll cover the American Memorial Day.

Welcome to our group blog. This May our Group Blog is on editing. All books go through multiple edits. What have you learned are your problems, and what irks you about editing?

We do go through many edits. The first few are our own edits before we send anything off. After the first draft we edit for sentence structure, spelling, grammar, character development, interior and exterior conflict, plot, red herrings and probably a lot more. Then we edit again. Then off to our editors, revisions and back for more editing. I think all of us want the best polished novel possible for our readers.

What are my problems? Ah, so many challenges. I tend to use passive voices – was – a lot. I need to use words that are more active and vivid.  As well I use crutch words like smiled, glared, stared, and words like ‘just’ and ‘that’. I also have some punctuation issues, like where to put the comma.

Editing takes time and it’s technical and not creative. working with your muse, but it’s a necessary evil for a well-written story.

I think what irks me about editing is that no matter how many edits you do, or how many people edit it or look at it, when you read the final published copy – there’s always an error – which someone immediately points out. Sigh…

I’m looking forward to seeing what our other authors have to say about editing and what irks them.

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Anne Stenhouse  http://annestenhousenovelist.wordpress.com/

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Kayelle Allen writes space opera with larger than life, unforgettable characters. Come walk in her worlds and meet her misbehaving robots, mythic heroes, immortal gamers, and warriors who purr.

Interview with Luc Saint-Cyr

Beverley: What’s your name?

Luc: That depends. I’m immortal. I’ve had hundreds. For the sake of the story Kayelle Allen is telling now, let’s agree it’s Luc Saint-Cyr. But in the story, my king refers to me as Cyken, and a couple other older names are mentioned, plus my original name at creation was Cyr… so you see why I say “It depends.”

Beverley: Where did you grow up?

Luc: I was created fully grown rather than born; on Earth in the year 2501. My first twenty years were spent traveling in the Terran Crescent, a group of thirteen planets. I don’t consider Earth my home, but technically, it is.

Beverley: During what time period does your story take place?

Luc: The current Earth year is 15,111, or 4648 Tradestandard in the Tarthian Empire, far in your future.

Beverley: What’s your story/back story?

Luc: How long do you have? I’m twelve thousand something. Stopped giving exact dates a few millennia ago. I’m known among humans as the Harbinger, which is my Thieves’ Guild name. I’m also known as Shadow, the right hand of the king, and in this story, I’m living my first life free from his influence. Which is like saying I’m staying dry while walking through a hurricane. Not happening. But I’m trying.

Beverley:   Why would someone come up with a story about you?

Luc: Kayelle loves Pietas, my king, and Senthys, who is a toddler in this story, and I come along with the package. She tells the boy’s story through my eyes, and gives insight into Pietas also. Well, a bit of my story too. But the boy is far more interesting and lovable.

Beverley: What’s your goal in this story?

Luc: To figure out how to keep my so-called freedom while not disappointing or undermining my king, while also figuring out how to best protect Senthys, who is a brilliant young boy. The lad shows amazing talent and I want him to have the best. At the same time, I’ve discovered that the Thieves’ Guild, which I have led in the past, is in danger of crumbling into ruin. There are other disasters as well. My life is never easy. Not complaining, mind you, but it would be nice if Kayelle gave me a break now and then.

Beverley: What conflicts are you facing?

Luc: What am I not? My king, with whom I had a torrid relationship for centuries has promised me this life as a free man, not serving him directly. After thousands of years of service, I deserve one, don’t I? Although he and I have not been a “couple” for too many centuries to count, Pietas has never given up on the idea that I’ll come back to him. I’m convinced he’s orchestrated the various disasters in this story just to win me back. The man does not understand the words “done, over you, or not happening.” What makes it even worse is that although I have solid reasons for not being with him, I still love him.

Beverley: Do you have a plan for resolving them?

Luc: A plan? Can you hear me laughing? I swear, making a plan around Pietas is like building a house with a deck of cards in a windstorm. I’m trying. But it seems there is someone outside our circle of influence who is undermining everything I do. It’s quite vexing. That last sentence sounded exactly like Pietas.

Beverley: Is there anything else you’d like us to know about you?

Luc: I always try to do the right thing, and I’m so loyal to Pietas that I earned the name Shadow. I stick that close to his side. A less flattering name for me is the King’s Dog. This life, being on my own, is exciting — and at the same time — terrifying. But overall, my strongest goal is to serve the mission and serve the king.

Interview with Lord Pietas

Beverley: What’s your name?

Pietas Pietas. I’ve used other names in other lives, but “Pietas” is who I am at heart. It’s one of the Greek virtues. I am nothing like what it represents, and I like it that way.

Beverley: Where did you grow up?

Pietas On Earth, in a tiny town in Wales called Nevern. It’s a real place in your world. You can look it up.

Beverley: During what time period does your story take place?

Pietas In my people’s time period, it’s the Peril year 1944, the Earth year 15,111, and 4648 Tradestandard. Your far, far future.

Beverley: What’s your story/back story?

Pietas I was born as a twin. I have a sister minutes younger. I adore her but every single time we get together we are at each other’s throats. Figuratively. So far. I worked my way up the ranks in my people’s army, became a leader, was elected Chancellor (king), was exiled due to a wretched betrayal, and in exile, learned that humans were not the enemy I perceived them to be. Now, I’m trying to make up for the carnage I inflicted when I was a soldier, but having an immortal waltz in and tell humans what to do simply doesn’t work. I’ve tried that. So instead, my followers and I protect and guide in secret. I’m sorry, what was your original question? I tend to ramble.

Beverley: Why would someone come up with a story about you?

Pietas What a silly question. I’m the king. I’m quite fascinating as a person. Ask any of my followers. They’ll tell you. But please keep in mind that you should discount the word “narcissist” — my followers use it to try keeping me humble. Poor deluded souls. As if that wasn’t my nature already.

Beverley: What’s your goal in this story?

Pietas To win Cyken back (you probably think of him as Luc), and to keep a type of advanced space travel out of the hands of an enemy, while keeping that specific knowledge away from Cyken. If he knew the truth, he would balk. I’ve had to resort to trickery with him countless times. Yes, he is loyal to a fault, and he loves me, but he’s so headstrong that I must constantly work to… let’s not say “control” him. Let’s say I try to do what’s best for him, because he doesn’t always recognize what that is. But I do.

Beverley: What conflicts are you facing?

Pietas What am I not? Cyken, an unseen enemy, my sister, Cyken… and did I say Cyken?

Beverley: Do you have a plan for resolving them?

Pietas My darling, if I revealed that here, it would not serve me well. I shall keep that to myself.

Beverley: Is there anything else you’d like us to know about you?

Pietas Yes. I’m Kayelle’s favorite. You should see her website! Pictures of me are all over it. Well, actually, they are pictures of Nik Nitsvetov dressed as me, but the likeness is uncanny. Looking at him is like looking into a mirror. He even captures what Cyken so annoyingly calls my “broody look.” Honestly, why Cyken fascinates me I cannot fathom. But that’s how love is. You love someone despite their difficulties and foibles. I’m Welsh by birth. We understand the concept hiraeth . It means longing for something you’ve never had, never will have, but did have, and an ache for what might have been. It’s a difficult word to define. It comes upon you like a shroud, or a cloak. I have hiraeth on me for Cyken. I will never be free of him. Which is probably the most important thing you can know about me.

Blurb for A Stolen Heart

Sci-Fi with romantic elements and an adorable little hero.

When he rescues a half-human orphan, a glorified space pirate turned entrepreneur sets in motion a chain of events that threatens to topple the powerful Thieves’ Guild he once led.

Multiple layers of conspiracy unfold, reaching all the way to Luc’s immortal ex–the king. Behind each solved mystery looms an unseen foe, undoing the good Luc accomplishes. For the sake of this child, Luc must postpone his own freedom and master his desire for revenge or he will violate an ancient vow. Worse, he’ll put the toddler at risk.

At war with his compassion for the vulnerable child, loyalty to the king, duty to the Guild, and the bright lure of freedom he’s coveted for centuries, Luc seeks the right path. Will he choose liberty and unparalleled success, or restore the Thieves’ Guild to its former glory while overseeing the child’s training?

A hard choice for any man. For an immortal whose inner monster can destroy on sight? Impossible.

A pirate with a monstrous past can never be trusted with an innocent child. Luc must ensure the child is protected, safe, nowhere near danger. Nowhere near him. Even if this little boy has already stolen his heart…

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Has so much emphasis been placed by readers and writers’ groups, publishers, reviewers, etc. on authors to have a spectacular opening page/chapters that the rest of the story gets left behind? What are your thoughts?

Ever since I can remember writers have been told the opening needs to grab the reader. It might be the opening line or maybe the first few pages, but you need to get the reader interested and hold that interest for the first few pages, so they’ll keep reading. It should be where there is a life changing event for the hero or heroine and needs to hold the readers interest, long enough so they fall in love with your hero or heroine, or they need to see how the plot plays out or maybe they want to read and learn a little more about the setting. This could be a death, a murder, an arrest, some inheriting a B&B, or maybe forced to meet an old lover. Do you have a favorite inciting incident as either a writer or reader?

Different writers use different techniques to grab their readers but if they can’t do it, chances are their book won’t be read, or maybe won’t even be bought. I’ve watched people in bookstores (before the corona virus hit).  Different readers check out books in different ways. For some it’s the cover. For others it’s the back-cover blurb, but others open the book and start reading those first few pages. If it doesn’t grab them the book goes back on the rack.

How important do you think first lines and first pages are? Do they influence you? I’ve judged a lot of contests and many of those books only got read because I had to judge the whole book. If it had been a book I was reading by choice, I would have stopped after a few pages.

Here are a couple of first lines. What do you think, do you want to read the book?

Heart thundering with exertion, fifteen-year old Jane Killlian treaded water. Sunlight reflected off the lake’s glassy surface, blindingly bright. “See Jane Die” by Erica Spindler

The man behind the cluttered desk looked like the devil and Neil Dysart figured that was par for her course since she’d been going to hell for a year and a half anyway. “Fast Women” by Jennie Crusie

You’ve got to stop this.”

Her husband’s voice reached her slowly, as if from a great distance, even though she knew he was standing at the doorway to her daughter’s room. “Stalked” by Elizabeth Heiter